Addiction- The Poem
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I leave a scar, may heal , may not be
Addiction I am and be afraid of me
Relationships in doldrums
And denial becomes the norms
Wow ! I am powerful
Not one to be merciful
Wandering to find preys in different forms
Get youths to abuse and transform
Holding sway over senses, I play with brains
Illusion, delusion, delirium all in the game
I leave a scar, may heal , may not be
Addiction I am and be afraid of me.
Blood on my hands, whom to blame ?
Mercenaries are out,
there is no shame
Allowing youths to take on loopholes
Basking in ignobility having no soul
Signing death warrants, I wait and wait
Disguises are many, I
am just a bait
I leave a scar, may heal , may not be
Addiction I am and be afraid of me.
Oh! I hate braves who
dare to fight
I marvel at their courage and their might
Going to rehab makes me shudder
Framing their own opinion and fighting fear
De-craving process, keeps me on toes
I become victim , they heroes
Coordination, perception , concentration regained
Setbacks, bumps, pitfalls thoroughly drained
Spring season bring ecstasy to blooms
Enjoying new world banishing gloom
A new beginning has been made
I, the ‘addiction’ has been caged
I no longer then leave a scar
Ultimately they win, its bizarre
Ultimately they win, its bizarre.
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All rights reserved/Tribhawan Kaul/18-05-2016
Re: Addiction - The Poem
ReplyDeleteWednesday, 18 May, 2016 11:28 PM
From:
"Sarindha Sethi"
To:
"kaul tribhawan"
Beautiful !
Thank you veryyyy much.
Can we communicate tomorrow afternoon please ?
You must publish this.
It is such a comprehensive description of Addiction,detoxification, craving & recovery-- ALL IN ONe. !
Wonderful Sir,
Thankfully, grateful
Best Regards,
Sarindha.
Date & Time: 5/19/2016 2:21:00 AM
ReplyDeletePoem: 45809953 - Addiction - The Poem
Member: Pranayee Gupta Rachamalla
Comment: Nice work dear poet! Each and every line is meaningful and the way you expressed it was just fabulous....! Thanks for sharing!
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ReplyDeleteDate & Time: 5/19/2016 2:01:00 AM
Poem: 45809953 - Addiction - The Poem
Member: Kumarmani Mahakul
Comment: Addiction is bad and this is harmful for human life. This poem is entirely very thought provoking.10
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Hardeep Sabharwal
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May 28 at 9:00pm
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Main Hoon
Ali Different states of mind.......but ending with bizarre make yr "addiction" interesting sir.
May 28 at 9:07pm
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Indira Sharma
Beautiful
May 28 at 9:14pm
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Ranjita Singh
ReplyDeleteMay 28 at 9:18pm
Very nice. ...
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Hasmukh Mehta
May 28 at 9:25pm
Nice one.. force non starrer.....Force non starrer. It is parental job That robs Youth of their legitimate right And forces to fight Upon failure They venture Into area of darkness With no future of bright face
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Gina Ancheta Agsaulio
May 28 at 9:31pm
Perfect description and perception over addiction <3 :)
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Parupudi Satyavenkatavinodkumar
ReplyDeleteMay 28 at 9:34pm
A very Deep expression and a very burning subject..... Thank you for the share Dear Tribhawan Kaul Jee....... i wrote sometime back about Craving that touched a part of this monstrous dis-ease......... __/'\_
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Harish Bhatia
May 28 at 9:43pm
the poetry's Czar,Sir!!
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Ramkishore Upadhyay
May 28 at 9:45pm
Nice poem...purposeful
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Pushp Lata
Thank you sir for sharing its really worth reading wonderful poem
May 28 at 10:54pm
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Hasmukh Mehta 9:30pm May 28
ReplyDeleteForce non starrer.
Somebody is workaholic
Somebody is prolific
Some may prove good alcoholic
And some are proven addicts
As you find always
There are ways
To find means with glimmer of hope
Even though it is walking on right rope
Where is today’s youth?
Are they gripped in the yoke of death?
If answer is “yes”
We are likely to face the Dark Age
It is parental job
That robs
Youth of their legitimate right
And forces to fight
Upon failure
They venture
Into area of darkness
With no future of bright face
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Rekha Joshi
ReplyDeleteMay 28 at 10:06pm
very nice
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Fatima Afshan
May 28 at 10:53pm
Wonderful poem Sir! So pleasant to read!
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Nimal Dunuhinga
May 28 at 10:58pm
then leave a scar..........tattooed!
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Sarindha Sethi
May 29 at 8:19am
Dont have to have a scar ! As a specialist, I can vouch for for it.
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Tapeshwar Prasad
ReplyDeleteMay 28 at 11:52pm
Caged, yet bizarre behind the bars! Inebriated, yet caged by the lovely lines dear Sir. :)
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Himanny Arora
May 28 at 10:53pm
Wow sir. So touching. Apt description!
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Jatinder Singh Bhogal
May 29 at 6:01am
Deep thoughts, very well written
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Maansi Gagroo Jain
ReplyDeleteMay 29 at 6:07am
Very nice and apt
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Sarindha Sethi
May 29 at 7:11am
TKji,Wonderfully explained-" ADDICTION".The essence is " Though cured,Addiction can be cured" Thank you for tagging me. I am sharing it.
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Sarindha Sethi
May 29 at 7:20am
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Sarindha Sethi
May 29 at 7:16am
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Parupudi Satyavenkatavinodkumar
ReplyDeleteMay 29 at 7:20am
Dear Tribhawan Kaul Jee below is the poem that i wrote about Craving: (BAD) Craving (BAD) Everywhere it went No where can it go Without people following They are just sitting there Watching Waiting For this soul to slip up For most souls It needs to be done a few times But for this soul Its that first hit that gets it hooked Oh that taste That seals the fate Its not that the soul didn’t try The urge overwhelms and consumes A preying beast in the night Having no mercy towards the hapless prey Every time it plans to do something Every time it tries to overcome some hurdle It just goes haywire Not because of inability But because it slipped It slipped down Walking away would have been the best When it saw the first act of pour It should have said “NO” But instead it sat there and drenched its fate Giving up its life Wouldn’t it be a miracle if the family forgave For the pain and sufferings caused Breathing incessantly With a will to fight It just willed to say Pardon Me Pardon Me Wishing it could do it all over again To walk on a better path Questioning the very life Looking back Every one had told at least once See the reality and live the present Blinded was it so for no gain At thence and then The day came Futile excuses became lame Time for a change Time to be with the time For every new moment is a new gift And every gone moment is a dead rift Is it not true That Its never too late to be happy I think rightly So SWANSH.. Copyright@12/8/2015.
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Rajendra Padhi
ReplyDeleteMay 29 at 7:33am
A wonderful message in the poem to heal and inspire towards goodness is the desire of the poetic soul. nicely composed dear sir.
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Sonia Gupta
May 29 at 7:49am
wonderful sir..as usual :)
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Meera Passi
May 29 at 8:48am
Wonderful!
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Manjula Verma Thakur
May 29 at 10:49am
Brilliant
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ReplyDeleteMay 29 at 10:50am
I leave a scar, may heal , may not be Addiction I am and be afraid of me...... beautiful composition on a social issue, that need absolute attention. Merely showing few ads on tv and in cinema halls is not going to help. Powerful words, Sir!
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Hari Lakhera
May 29 at 4:48pm
Beautiful words. Addiction of any kind can be so masterly.
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Rose Angel Rajshree Kaul
May 29 at 4:54pm
Beautifully warned ...by addiction itself . A noble appreciable work ... Pen is a mighty resource ....
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Col Charanjit Dayal
ReplyDeletelovely...
May 28 at 8:55pm
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Ram Kesh Mishra
As for as i realize ;the poem is excellent.
May 28 at 9:17pm
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Sandra Martyres
ReplyDeleteMay 30 at 3:22pm
Very real Tribhawanji...addiction is a curse. You bring out the essence of this social evil in your poem. TFS
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Irene Heveanly
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Ramesh Rai
June 1 at 12:15pm
Beautiful write.
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Jai Krishna
June 1 at 3:01pm
Masterly written .
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ReplyDeleteJay Gandhi
a lot of abstraction here
May 28 at 11:18pm
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Tribhawan Kaul
Thanks . Yes I agree. The poet like an artist too brings some imagination to its works but with some truth which separates the two.:)
May 29 at 11:42am
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Jay Gandhi
Though not a necessity, a poem largely works on images. it depends more on what we show and not on what we tell. we have to allow the reader to feel what he wants to and not force our viewpoint. Yes, message is most important.
By far, a poem full of verbs works more for me than pure nouns. I like the usage of metaphors in this poem. But then there are one too many.
What I say is constructive criticism. I believe you are a seasoned poet and hence know what to pick and what to lose.
Your poem is a lot of "tell" . I expect a lot of "show"
May 29 at 11:56am
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Tribhawan Kaul
Yes..well said...but this time I want to 'tell' not show...I want my readers to wake up to reality....last stanza is for those who could come out of the stupor ....as a poet, I have to have some liberty...it is so nice of you to air your constructive views. Love that. :)
May 29 at 12:03pm
Jay Gandhi
thank you sir. would love to read more from you :)
May 29 at 12:07pm
Tribhawan Kaul
Jay Gandhi Thank you. Happy reading and writing. Stay blessed :)
May 29 at 12:09pm
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Sadia Khan
ReplyDeleteWow! Wonderful this is, Sir
May 29 at 7:58am
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Shabir Ahmad Mir
Wow... Loved this
May 29 at 8:03am
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Niti Ahuja
The poetry !! Loved it
May 29 at 8:28am
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Bindu Babu
Superb Sir...what a perspective when you say, 'be afraid of me'.
May 29 at 10:15am
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Date & Time: 7/4/2016 8:18:00 AM
ReplyDeletePoem: 45809953 - Addiction - The Poem
Member: Valsa George
Comment: Addiction of any sort can be dangerous..... Mostly youngsters fall prey to it..... To ward off addictions one needs determination and grit! When freed from its clutches, happiness blooms! Great write!
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