Destiny
of a flower
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World
of spring blesses me
Sadness
diminishes with blooms
Blushing
brides dancing with grooms.
Flowering
into flowers, life draws full circle
Prayers
accepted yet happiness eludes me
Plucked
now and then, the habit ,floors me.
Places
sacrosanct lap my presence
Hair
adore me to lure its men
Yet
crushed and mutilated in my own den.
Life
of anonymity leading to despondency
Human
nature crosses the bar
Hope
survives me as spring is never too far.
Time
remains dominant
Spring
just confusion in mind
Transmigration,
a soulful grind.
Clock
wheel turns ushering blooming season
Shudder
to think of bygone misery
Seeds
of present again shaping my destiny.
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Anjana Mishra
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18 July at 3:29pm
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Pintu Mahakul
Nature has power to give us relief from stress. We feel very happy seeing even a small flower. Seeds of present again and again give shaping to our destiny. Time remains dominant and flowers deeply impact our lives. Seeing blooming of flowers we realize blooming of life in God's garden. Very beautifully penned excellent poem is shared here.
July 18 at 3:37pm
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Sujit Mukherjee
ReplyDeleteI loved the title of your poem Destiny of a flower " so similar to our destiny ....our flowering and dropping are not in our hand ...
July 18 at 6:15pm
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Meenakshi Sukumaran
Beautiful
July 18 at 5:20pm
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Satyananda Sarangi
Whilst this flower born in spring knows no end
Nor does succumb to autumn or winter;
It sparkles the dew like sunrays Godsend,
That no obnoxious weed can deter.
- Satyananda Sarangi
July 18 at 11:16pm
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Indira Sharma
Beautiful
July 19 at 12:16pm
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Baleshwar Purohit
What a breathtaking poem dear friend
July 19 at 4:21pm
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Shrihari Wani
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हमे हर समय हँसने की वजह मिले न मिले परन्तु रोने के अनेक कारण हर समय हर जगह मिल ही जाते है ...क्या इसीलिए बुद्ध ने कहा था ...संसार में सर्वत्र दुःख ही दुःख है...क्या इसीलिए सुख क्षणिक और दुःख दीर्घजीवी होता है
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Sagar Kataria
ReplyDeleteNice poem Tribhawan Kaul but you have used past tense and present tense in one line only. If this is a poem narrated by a flower, then it is quite confusing.
World of spring blesses me
Sadness diminishes with blooms
Blushing brides dancing with grooms.
Here in the first para, the first two lines relate to a flower saying about itself, and the third line is a scene where you have quoted that blushing brides dancing. Kindly give this poem a read again, I regret for pointing out this as this is a case in every para of this poem.
July 22 at 12:18pm
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Tribhawan Kaul
@ Sagar Kataria : it is nice of you to have read the poem and I appreciate your observation. The interpretation can never be on the same page of a poet and a reader. A poem is always open to various interpretations. I respect your observation but at the same time I must add that a poet always visualizes the subject in different way than meets the eye. If a reader finds something unusual in every stanza of the poem, it may be deliberate. First two lines make a statement and third line gives a stunning dimension to the subject though may be of the past and in the past tense or both. Without past, there can never be the present These stanzas are like haikus (repeat like haikus) but are not actually haikus as this form of poetry is limited to syllable counts 5-7-5 and are always in present tense. However, taking cue from haiku form of poetry, the poet has taken liberty to present his poetry in past-present . to its readers, of a flower’s (metaphor for a girl, lady, sex worker etc.) destiny in its various manifestations which transmigrates it to its new role. Thanks for your presence on this poem of mine. :)
July 22 at 10:58pm
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Sujit Mukherjee
Wonderful poem . Flower s teaches us our destiny...to bloom then fade ...
July 23 at 8:01am
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