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The moon
I want to pull
Out of jaws of clouds
To dispel the darkness
Shadowing over the human psyche of intolerance.
The truth
I want to reveal
With the churning of thoughts
Injustice meted out long ago
Sure, will be marginalised by so and so.
The plough
I want to plough
Deeper and deeper to sow the seeds
To grow plants of love ignoring power of sleaze
Bullshit ! None cares when a rapist gets his release.
The victim
I want to see
Brave enough to come out of closet
To tell also story of partnering the crime
Doesn’t it take two words up-down to rhyme ?
The poem
I want to write
Pour my heart and cleanse my soul
May be booed as truth is a bitter pill
So is digging the grave and beans to spill.
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Date & Time: 10/30/2018 11:38:00 PM
Poem: 53676666 - Threnody Of The Truth
Member: Kumarmani Mahakul
Comment: What a wonderful poem. I quote....The poem
I want to write
Pour my heart and cleanse my soul
May be booed as truth is a bitter pill
So is digging the grave and beans to spill
thanks for sharing.10
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Date & Time: 11/1/2018 3:06:00 AM
Poem: 53676666 - Threnody Of The Truth
Member: Mohammed Asim Nehal
Comment: AWESOME! ! ! ! This is the wish of every single human who wants love and peace on earth, the world has been passing through its most difficult times since 2nd world war phase, hatred on peak, bullshiting on peak, leaders are enjoying an unlimited power by virtue of manipulations done in the democratic setup. Let us all hope that the better sense will prevail and poets will keep showing the mirror in their own ways. A profound poem with substance and touch of current affairs and reality.10+++
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Main Hoon Ali
November 3 at 5:18 PM
A very good poem after a long break I see.Thanks for tagging me sir.
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Ramkishore Upadhyay
November 3 at 5:56 PM
Very nice lines
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वसुधा कनुप्रिया
November 3 at 6:24 PM
Nice thought, presented well with conviction.
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Bindi Sharma
November 3 at 6:33 PM
Intense
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Shelleyandra Kapil
November 3 at 7:47 PM
Thanks for tagging me.
The truth will prevail,
Metoo has set the trail,
There will be justice,
The courage will definitely
Prevail
Pranam
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Nirmal Shali
November 3 at 7:48 PM
Nice lines with meaningful thought.
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Rajeshwer Sharma
November 3 at 9:54 PM
Critics may boo or adore pen should not stop from revealing the truth...!
Beautiful poem
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Pintu Mahakul
November 4 at 3:50 AM
Pintu Mahakul Deeper and deeper we feel the moon. Brighter and brighter this moon shines. Out of jaws of clouds we see the beautiful moon dispels the darkness and gives us calm light. A great poem is well penned basing on perception. Thank you sir very much for sharing this.
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Gina Ancheta Agsaulio
November 4 at 4:57 AM
And you are doing it very well, fantastically expressed <3 :)
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Ashish Chandrana
November 4 at 8:10 AM
Lovely read... The opening up with first stanza itself wowed... Sunday morning never started this good... I love reading poems... reading your poems is like I'm gifting myself Diwali presents. On every of good reading is like unwrapping myself ..thank you very much ji
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Hari Lakhera
November 4 at 8:39 AM
The dilemma !!!
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DrAtiraj Singh
November 5 at 10:33 AM
Very nice.... Meaningful thought.
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Wendy Abby Lazo
November 9 at 12:05 AM
It goes straight to my heart.💘so touching I can actually feel every word. Nice piece of work mdfTribhawan Kaul!
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Srikala 10:18pm Nov 20
Beautiful lines Sir 🙂
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Awadifo Olga Kili 10:18pm Nov 20
Thanks Most dearest. I'm so happy, motivated and inspired about that.
Please may God bless you
Great strides Kaul
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Andrew Jonathan Daniels 10:18pm Nov 20
honesty is the truth of guiding light
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Toloko Woyindenyefa Matthew 10:18pm Nov 20
Nice one.
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Andrew Fledgeling 12:22am Nov 21
A great well written post
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Sunil Kaushal 11:30am Nov 21
I did not get your exact meaning when you write .....the victim I want to see brave enough to come out of closet to tell also story of partnering the crime.
Doesn't it take two words up down to rhyme ?.........
ARE YOU TRYING TO SAY THAT A RAPE victim IS A PARTNER IN CRIME.?
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Tribhawan Kaul
Let me thank you for your presence on this poem and insightful observation. The stanza is open to interpretations. The poet utters the word ‘ Victim’ Victim can be a male or female. Though the poet did not say ‘rape’ any one can construe that according to his/her perception. No one is perfect. Check out the fate of living in relationships. Both sides play victim card once breakup happens. Both are the patners in crime but only one is punished. The story of another one remains unheard always. Happy reading and writing :)
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Sunil Kaushal
Tribhawan Kaul these particular lines come right after you have written about noone caring when a rapist is acquitted free......it gets linked to the next stanza and conveys the impression that a rapist goes scot free and the victim should come out of the closet.
There are no other words to break the continuity of thought.
Anyone reading cannot know or understand your mind or thoughts ....only what is put into words which here certainly need some intersection.
However it is your poem and you are entitled to give it any form.
As a reader I felt the need to clarify your viewpoint.
Thanks for your justification.
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Tribhawan Kaul
Sunil Kaushal Ji. It is really nice of you to speak your concern. The title itself says a lot about a poem and the poem has subpoems within it with subtitles. Each stanza stands apart from the other one. I am not justifying my writing. You are very correct in your perception and as a poet I feel otherwise. Here lies the beauty of poetry. Thanks once again. Happy reading and writing. :)