Monday 6 October 2014

Patience

Patience
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Sky is dark
Clouds mar the show
The sun is brought down on it knees
Out of the blue
Rainbow brings some solace
Life is bound to sustains itself
With  positive thoughts
And outlook
Darkness proves to be momentary
Only Momentary
Those who are not in hurry
Sky gets clear
And the sun shines bright again.
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20 comments:

  1. Valsa George (10/6/2014 11:15:00 PM)
    Patience brings rich dividends! Seeing something unpleasant, we often come to a negative conclusion! But if we are ready to wait for a little more time with patience, we can see things taking a brighter turn! Enjoyed! (Report) Reply

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  2. Gajanan Mishra (10/6/2014 8:52:00 AM)
    life is bound to sustain itself, good writing, thanks. (Report)

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  3. You describe patience so well with this example of momentary change in weather patterns dear friend. Full of expert use of metaphor and a favourite piece of imagery to me in this verse has to be "when the sun is brought down on its knees"
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  4. Very deep and thought provoking. Well done.
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  5. RAJ NANDY
    Yes, the poem teaches us an enduring lesson that patience always pays! –Raj

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  6. Pintu Mahakul (10/8/2014 4:46:00 PM)
    Clouds mar the show and sun is brought down on its knees and shines bright with great patience. Very beautiful poem that talks about patience and its power. Excellent work.

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  7. VAS Yesterday, 21:34
    My dear TK,
    As usual a good poem on patience.
    One can not become patient if got patience that gives peace of mind.
    Dark or bright sun always shine...

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  8. Babu Yesterday, 18:35
    There is Sun always but at times it gets hidden by clouds...
    So also Life is Active but obstructed by various sources.....

    A good poem by TK....

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  9. Promilla Qazi 8:53pm Oct 9
    Beautiful poem with a positive message
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    Vinay Kumar 8:25pm Oct 9
    Very nice :)
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    Rahul Ahuja 8:20pm Oct 9
    Amazing write.

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  10. Pramila Khadun 9:50pm Oct 9
    Shine with positive beams.
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    Ampat Koshy 8:17pm Oct 9
    lovely sir :)

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  11. Hasmukh Mehta 5:20am Oct 10

    Keep patience. so lovely poem.....We have no patience
    We want everything as instance
    “Retaliation” I hear the world from politicians
    They speak same rhetoric as musician

    How many people are getting killed?
    When shells across the border are fired
    We all cry for blood but fail that fire does not discriminate
    It shall spill blood wherever hit to retaliate

    People are in hurry
    That causes more worry
    The load in their head is permanent to carry
    After all so helpless and to remain scary!

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  12. Sandra Martyres 9:17am Oct 10
    Lovely poem Tribhawanji
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    Siamir Marulafau 5:03am Oct 10
    The above sentence such as "Those who are not in hurry" indicates the the theme related to the topic and supported by the last line of the poem.
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    Heather Burns 4:28am Oct 10
    beautiful writing

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  13. Scott Ransopher 9:29am Oct 10
    That was good Tribhawan!

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  14. Armstrong Zugu 2:22pm Oct 10
    Awesome!
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    Swadhin Shaktiprasad 8:55pm Oct 9
    The poem portrays the truth of life.. good one

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  15. Geetha Jayakumar (10/12/2014 1:37:00 PM)
    Beautiful poem with great message. Very true said, waiting patiently for the sun to shine bright again would be better than bringing sun down to knees. Let the sun shine high in sky, also our thoughts shine in sky. loved the positive message it carried. Loved reading it.

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  16. Soumya Mohanty Vilekar 1:04am Oct 13
    the philosophy of hope and faith.

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  17. Siamir Marulafau 7:02am Oct 13
    It is good for the poet to give a message for the readers to be patient in live because it is one of the keys to get success in lfe.

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  18. Hasmukh Mehta 7:22am Oct 23

    Nice presentation...As nature plays beautiful part
    We need to feel and present it as an art
    How rain lashes at earth?
    And remind us of fresh life and possible death

    Life must move on
    Let bye gone remain as bye gone
    We are here to sustain and move
    Life has an opportunity to prove

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  19. Rajendra Padhi 7:44pm Oct 28
    Those who are not in hurry
    Sky gets clear
    And the sun shines bright again.... wonderful lines .

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  20. Date & Time: 10/11/2014 7:42:00 AM
    Patience
    Member: Points Of View
    There is sunshine always after the dark clouds...All we need is Patience while waiting for the sun to come out. :) ging

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